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Money should be spent on creating new buildings such as museums or town halls rather than renovating the existing one. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #buildings #museums #town #halls
The world is full of offence and it can be
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committed
commited
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committed
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adults
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difference
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among
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justice. In major of
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situations
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 punishments
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However
, there are two opinions about
this
 system. One says that it is fair, others
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 the opposite view. I am really convinced that legislation ought not to treat them in the same way.
Firstly
, youngsters are not too
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conspicuous
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most
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occasions, decisions are wrong and they need adult's advice
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 because youths do not have
such
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, that's why in the major part of the world countries established that 18 plus age individuals are
adults
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 of studies proved that exactly
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 the age of 18,
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a person
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 finds himself and becomes more rational. They tend to be more mature
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their
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 consequences. To
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individual
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crime because of immatureness,
likewise
, if a child stole a toy from a stranger. He does not understand why it is prohibited. I think
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 retributions must be mitigated.
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 the stage called transitional age. Where there
are
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 emotional and
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psychological
phychological
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psychological
 instability, to clarify, we can not assume that they have fully formed their personality and
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strong opinions about whatever as opposed to adult people. They are still
changable
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changeable
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 variety of social groups, even though
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they might be wrong and illegal. It is obvious that managing youth is much
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easier, unlike
adults
. In conclusion, I want to say that youngsters are not enough rational and mature to make sensible decisions,
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what group they should join, because of
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 of their personality, From my point of view, there should be differences in terms of attitude towards
adults
 and young people.
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