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Young people who commit crimes should be treated the same as adults by the authorities. To what extent do you agree or agree

#people #crimes #adults #authorities
Nowadays,the crime rate increases with the
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were commit
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 the crime should
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 the government. I disagree with the given statement
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 a certain extent and will be discussed in the subsequent paragraph prior to the meaningful conclusion
To begin
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reasons behind it. The
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dignity .
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, if they should be punished
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 as the
criminals
 they must
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their reputation,
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 with those
criminals
.
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, they will face the
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difficulty
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jobs.
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, they were not able to do
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white collar
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 jobs.
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, if teenagers
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prison they should arise
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more criminal
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activities
activites
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activities
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criminals
 owing to they mix with each other.
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, they were spoiled
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 own future because in
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no-one
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 them. They
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 away from their kith and kins.
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least they crossed their limits and fear will die forever. To conclude ,undoubtedly the
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lawmakers
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law makers
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lawmakers
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punishment to the
youngones
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young ones
 but not
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 as adult
criminals
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