Many parents encourage young people to leave home when they become older, while others think they should stay at home with family. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
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lifestyle and their residence are discussable issues.
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, the issue is not entirely
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, and arguments can
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be made against the idea.
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essay will discuss the debate and give a conclusion view. On the one hand, proponents claim that young people should deport from
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and their families to become independent and learn to be responsible for their lives. It means that they should decide for themselves about their lives and plan for their future.
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, learn that all
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failures and
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depend on their decisions and operations.
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, they should
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go to work or continue their
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.
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, by quitting
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youth
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will find out how to have proper financial management.
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, they should find
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and pay all costs of their lives
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their own income.
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, they have to plan to allocate a part of their income to pay salaries, rent payment and
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food.
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, opponents of
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view point out that situation of young people is a significant factor in
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issue. In fact, in some cultures abandoning
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is not
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manner and most of
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these
youth
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are blamed.
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can be that
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in these societies hosts usually do not rent their
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home
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to single
youth
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. So, they have to undergo lots of pressure.
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, without parents’ superintendence, because of being far from family and being alone adolescents may join tormentor groups.
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of
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their future will
ruined
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.
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,
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bully them
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stealing or using drugs to accept them as a member of the group. Overall, it seems that being far from family has advantages like being independent and learning financial management, but in some societies, it is not
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lifestyle and would have disadvantages like creating
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a relationship
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relationship
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relationships
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with criminals. It would appear that staying at
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with family is
proper
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the proper
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idea that can promote the
youth
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to make apt plans for their future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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