Many parents encourage young people to leave home when they become older, while others think they should stay at home with family. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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having independent children. Some
parents
admire
youth
for
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up
home
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be transformed
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older, while others say they should remain at
home
with the family.
However
, the issue is not entirely
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,
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arguments
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can
also
be made against the idea.
This
essay will discuss the debate
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and give a concluding view. On the one hand, some
parents
assert that juniors leave
home
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when become
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,
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because they should quit and
to
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start new. Indeed, young
people
can find suitable job
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and have their own income.
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, they can rent
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home
with
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relevant income.
In addition
, protectors inspire
youth
to pull out
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home
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in order to, establish
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a relationship
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relationship
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relationships
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with new peers. In fact, young
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motivation, confidence and social skills will increase.
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can be that
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they can go
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, and party with friends, and achieve apt and useful experiences.
By contrast
, opponents of
this
view point out that, when youngers should not become older leave
parents
, because they cannot attain intellectual maturity, and they may not have more experience in life to solve problems lonely.
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, if
parents
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and spiritual, children will set up a new startup.
Furthermore
, if children stay with the family,
parents
will direct codes of conduct. It means that
parents
can prevent antisocial
behavior
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of
youth
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their experience, and lead them to
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way. The case could be,
parents
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can administrate young boys’ relationships with their friends, when they are
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to use drugs by their tormentor friends, they will be able to prevent their addiction. Overall, some
people
claim that keepers should admire youngers to give over for
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links and being independent.
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, some
parents
believe that
youth
stay at
home
, due to foster pecuniary, and take care of them.it seems advisable that it is better
young
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people
stay
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at
home
to have their
parents
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and superintendence than leave
home
early.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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