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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case ? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development.

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It is true that
smartphone
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contemporary society.
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, it is more common to see
children
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have their own
smartphone
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 than before. While some parents
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 a belief that it is normal and even conducive to their child; others hold the reverse viewpoints. From my perspective, it is a controversial topic which deserves an in-depth discussion.
Initially
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 that mobile enables
children
 to absorb and learn massive information happened or happening through different online resources.
For example
, even a baby can be familiar with the melodies of popular songs simply through
smartphone
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. And teenagers can self-learn what they really are interested in
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 the hyper-connected world without any physical limitations.
Moreover
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 that with appropriate use of smart-mobile, adolescents can alleviate their stress from studying or socializing, etc.
For instance
,
children
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 from lots of streaming media
such
 as Youtube to release their pressure. Or they can talk to
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 they want to pour their trouble out at
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 and anyplace. These compelling proofs indicate that with apposite use of
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smartphone
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,
children
 can benefit through
this
 perfect medium. At the other end of the spectrum,
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 proper using cellphone plays in developing
children
’s mental and physical health. Parents occasionally realize the extent to which most
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teenager
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 dwell in cyberspace because of incorrect recognition.
For example
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kids
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 would be addicted to online games which may waste their treasury time and even cause myopia.
Besides
 the aforementioned, without healthy and mature mental conditions,
children
 can be easily and latently affected by
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misleading information or even illegal news which may cause
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to
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 their minds. Based on
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 potentially negative
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 on kids,
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adult should properly guide their
children
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 to use the
smartphone
 correctly. In sum, improperly using the
smart-mobile
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 certainly has many demerits in the development of
children
;
However
, with
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, I personally believe that the advantages of smartphones far outweigh those disadvantages. As a proverb
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: ‘’If I have seen
further
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human society, it is reasonable to do it by the wisdom of the past.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • smartphones
  • usage
  • technology
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • entertainment
  • gaming
  • social media
  • communication
  • educational resources
  • addiction
  • dependence
  • negative effects
  • physical health
  • mental health
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