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Some people feel that the legal age at which people can marry should be at least 21. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Marriage is a big decision in the journey of
life
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 which have to be made by two mature adults.
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 decision could bring joy or pain depending on the partner,
people
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 choose to marry. I completely agree that the older
people
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 are, the wiser
people
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 will be to make the right
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 in choosing the partner to marry. Let’s dive into why 21 years should be the legal
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 to marry.
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, most
people
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 at the
age
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 of 18 hardly
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 what career pathway to choose. Sometimes
people
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 think they know what they want but end up making
wrong
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the wrong
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 career
choice
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 and
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 from it. So,it is better to give them time before making
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life defining
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choice
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. I do understand sometimes couples are eager to show the world their love, so they want to marry as soon as possible. While
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 is true in
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 cases but
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the majority
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 of them feel regret later in
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life
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.
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, in many under-developed countries, the parents force their kids to arrange marriage,when they turn 18 without asking
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choice
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. If
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age
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 is pushed
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further
furthur
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further
, these adults will have more time to live
independent
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life
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 and can strongly oppose their parents.
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, most countries allow
people
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 to legally drink
alcohol
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 only at the
age
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 of 21. The government knows when an adult gets to know more about
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 impact,
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 they should be given
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 to drink
alcohol
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.
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 proves that an activity
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 as
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alcohol
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 has strong regulations
than
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 marriage should be given equal importance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Legal age
  • Marriage
  • Maturity
  • Stability
  • Individual choice
  • Freedom
  • Cultural practices
  • Religious practices
  • Education
  • Career aspirations
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