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Scientists tell us that some activities are good for health and others are bad. Despite knowing that, millions of people still continue doing unhealthy activities. What are the causes and what are the solutions for this?

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It is a fact that a large proportion of the population continues to engage in unhealthy
activities
, irrespective of expert advice, which is being increasingly witnessed.
This
 essay will discuss the main cause of
this
 phenomenon and
also
 suggest methods to solve
this
 problem. Examining the reasons, the most common is that
people
 are prone to underestimate the cumulative adverse effects of an unhealthy lifestyle as it doesn't occur immediately.
In addition
, many unhealthy
activities
 are addictive and
people
 can't leave them easily,
for example
, smoking is a slow killer and it is mentioned everywhere but
people
 continue to smoke . The solutions are not simple but they do exist.
Firstly
, Government should increase taxes on unhealthy products ,especially on cigarettes so it should be hard for everyone to buy and consume them.
Secondly
, media channels should promote healthy lifestyles and criticise unhealthy
activities
.
Furthermore
, higher authorities can conduct different sports events which can encourage
people
 to participate and keep themselves healthy and fit for these events. To conclude the topic, it can be
finally
 commented that by self-motivation and with the help of the Government we can reduce the proportion of
people
 who are addicted to unhealthy
activities
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • addiction
  • chemical reactions
  • dependency
  • social and cultural norms
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • temptations
  • implementing policies
  • taxing
  • supportive environment
  • accountability
  • unhealthy habits
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