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Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys.

#parents #children #toys #child
In
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Mother
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 and
father
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 are buying a tremendous amount of playthings for their offspring which are good for their cognitive development,
Hence
, there is a disadvantage to
this
 as well, which
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 will be discussing in
this
 essay. Nowadays, Some parents believe that buying a larger number of
toys
 for
kids
 is beneficial, it develops
them
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 cognitive ability and creativity.
For example
,
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 words are known for knowing more vocabulary words and there are some puzzle solving which can enhance the memory of one another. Back in the
,
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 days children were careful in selecting the
toys
 they want to purchase
it
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, as they know that it cost money to buy one. Some
kids
 know the value of money before they purchase
a
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toys
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toys
. In order hand, having a tremendous amount of playthings is
also
 not a good thing. As the offspring end up being
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, they will lack
of
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socializing with other
kids
 and even end up playing with their
toys
instead
 of joining other
kids
 for a fun, In conclusion, it is a good thing to buy
a
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toys
 but there should be a limit
of
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 the time to use them. The parents should know how to balance their social life as well.
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