With deforestation, urbanization and illegal hunting, may animal species be becoming endangered as they lose their habitat, and some are even to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?

Today, most wild
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to survive due to
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never ending
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greediness.
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some
animals
are on the brink of extinction, many people
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bothered and have no clue
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why
such
animals
are important,
thus
they have become money-minded machines.
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animals
and why it is important for every government to come up with
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rules and educational programs about the importance of wildlife.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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