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Some people advocate death penalty for those who committed violent crimes. Others say that capital punishment is unacceptable in contemporary society. Describe advantages and disadvantages of death penalty

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In recent times,
death
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penalty
 has become a debatable topic which is a significant role in the community but some
people
 strongly believe that capital
punishment
 should not enforce. the main advantage of the topic is that it would help to mitigate the
crime
 rate and the main drawback is that it can affect the economy, in
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides. On the on hand, the
crime
 rate has been increasing, it is a devastating problem
people
 have to concern
because
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 capital
punishment
 plays a crucial role in its society, there are common advantages, which contribute to us, the main benefit is that it would help to minimize the
crime
 rate in the nation if the authority
establish
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 the
death
penalty
, promote awareness about punishments and danger of rule obviously that way,
people
 will more conscious about the danger of rules
as a result
, the community would stop to negative activities.
For instance
, in Saudi Arabia,
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death
penalty
 has been implemented, Since it helps to mitigate their
crime
 rates over the period
furthermore
 another benefit is that the
next
 generation will learn lessons from these rules and regulations, it would aid
to
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 certainty personality development.
On the other hand
, the main disadvantage of
this
 phenomenon is that it would affect the economy because the government spend money on court session and
death
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penalty
 process because it is a huge expenditure on the economy as a consequence,
people
 would experience a financial crisis
moreover
 another negative aspect is that
,
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 sometimes
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court cannot justify innocent
people
 righteous
as a result
people
 have to face
punishment
.
For example
, in Saudi Arabia, most innocent
people
 have
been
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died because of the inaccurate court decision that way, which would physically and mentally affect
people
's life In conclusion, after a thorough analysis of the topic,
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also
 plays a vital part
of
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society
nevertheless
people
 believe that capital
punishment
 should not enforce. it can enforce the right method before starting it
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Advocates
  • Capital punishment
  • Contemporary society
  • Violent crimes
  • Deterrence
  • Retribution
  • Cost-effectiveness
  • Imprisonment
  • Innocent
  • Unethical
  • Inhumane
  • Misuse
  • Legal systems
  • Heinous crimes
  • Closure
  • Moral concerns
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