You recently bought an expensive electronic product from a store and found that the product does not work properly. Write a letter to store manager. In your letter, Complain about the problem Propose action for the store to take Request conformation that this is agreed

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Respected Sir/Ma'am, I am writing

this

letter to inform you that I have purchased a

television

last

week from your store which is not working properly.

Last

Wednesday, I visited your branch in Kitchener. I was impressed by the features of the recent invention of the

television

. The customer service representative whose name is Yash Patel helped me with the whole process of buying including the introduction of

television

, billing, and delivery. I believe that the sound system is not working properly as mentioned during the time of purchase. It feels like

this

television

is not worth it. I informed the main branch to solve the problem. The main branch asked me to send you the invoice for the product and request letter. I am attaching both mentioned documents with

this

email and hope that you will take an action as soon as possible by sending me a new

television

of replacement. I look forward to hearing back from you soon. Faithfully yours, Saleha Mansur

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

165 words

8.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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You recently bought an expensive electronic product from a store and found that the product does not work properly. Write a letter to store manager. In your letter, Complain about the problem Propose action for the store to take Request conformation that this is agreed

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Describe a place where you like to travel and give out reasons

In some countries, the difference in age between parents and children is generally greater than it was in the past. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

Although families have influence on a children’s development, factors outside the home play a bigger part in their lives nowadays. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

some people think that individuals are responsible to take care of own health and diet. But some claim that it is government' s duty. Discuss both views.

Some people think that climate change could have a negative effect on business. Other people think that climate change could create more business opportunities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.