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Some people think that studying history is a waste of time while others think that its essential to learn. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

History
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 is a mandatory subject in primary school for students and exam of the same should be passed to get promoted to the next grade. Some people believe that learning
history
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 is meaningless
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 others consider it
is
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important to
study
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.
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 paragraphs that studying
history
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 is essential. It is worth mentioning that several important events have happened in past when present in past when
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 generation was not in existence. The
study
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 of
history
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make
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 sense of understanding the
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historical
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 facts and culture of a different era in detail.
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, a
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 of
history
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 explains the lifestyle, struggles, social system, etc. of our forefathers. Considering these important aspects, the government has made
history
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subject
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as
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compulsory in primary and secondary education in India.
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 my point of view, the advantages of learning
history
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 outweigh the disadvantages. Education of other fundamental subjects;
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, mathematics, science, arts and languages
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 equally important. One should not forget that
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the study
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 of
history
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 may not improve technical knowledge, and information may not be implemented to solve recent problems.
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, arithmetic or scientific simulation cannot be solved with the help of historical data.
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,
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conceptual learning can be useful to appreciate the hardships of that time.
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, knowledge of
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 of subjects is essential in modern
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times
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 to understand different
era
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eras
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 and
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 all the subjects should be emphasized equally during the
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. The
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 provides details of olden cultures and hardships of
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particular times.

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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
You need to provide a more comprehensive and detailed response to the task. Make sure to address all aspects of the topic and present a well-rounded argument for both sides, including relevant examples and supporting details.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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