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Police in some countries like England don't carry guns. Some people don't approve of this because they think that police with guns gives them security. Others think that police carrying guns decreases crimes. What is your opinion? relevant examples and experiences.

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Police
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The police
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is
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are
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 a trustworthy
guard
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guards
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 of
the
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apply
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society.They protect us from
the
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apply
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criminals and thieves.These notorious people are very hard to catch.
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,in some of the countries,
bounties
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the bounties
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 of England don’t carry firing weapons with them.the huge population of British claimed that
such
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 weapons
gives
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give
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 them
safety
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more safety
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 than the local civilian.According to my opinion, police must carry
ammunitions
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ammunition
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 and
guns
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 in order to take
his
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apply
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or
her
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their
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 own safety measures while on duty as I will explain. Some of the developed European countries including England,Switzerland,Italy,Spain etc had opposed the use of pistols and
guns
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 as they anticipate that having
such
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 weapons gives them protection.Meanwhile,The safety of a guard is very essential as they have a huge responsibility to protect us.
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,many
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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European countries including Germany,Finland and Ireland are trying to include regulations
of
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on
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allowance
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the allowance
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 of
guns
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. Eventually,Crime rates are increasing.
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 in order to decrease crime rates and murders,Cops must always keep
guns
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 with them.
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