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"Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay"

#people #teacher
Everything has two sides and teaching by
teachers
 is not an exception. In the
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past it seemed like most people
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 studying on their own without any
teachers
,but today many people criticize it. We must acknowledge that teaching by tutors is much better and more helpful to
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our generation these days .That gives them a good chance of knowing how to deal with their materials which will increase their understanding. Studying with
teachers
 ,
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 many
students
 to deal with their recent studies and for the future as many
teachers
 have knowledge about future jobs and which problems they can face and how to deal with them. Tutors at schools and universities always care about
students
 and give them many duties as homework to check their understanding which will help
students
 a lot.
Nevertheless
, many people believe that teaching by yourself is better and easier. There are many proven scientific approaches that they share with
students
 to depend on themself.
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 reason for believing
this
 is that there are many books provided and many
students
 study by themself.
For example
, many
students
 study from their homes and learn a lot of information without
teachers
. Studying by yourself is free and you don't need to pay for your
teachers
 and your university. Another point is , that
teachers
 sometimes do not have the ability to know the pupils' weaknesses
as a result
students
 will not understand
while
 if the
students
 know their weakness he knows how to deal with them. In conclusion, I trust that teaching by
teachers
 is important for any
students
 who want to develop is level in any subject.
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task response
The essay does not fully address the prompt, and the arguments lack depth and clarity. More specific, detailed examples to support the points would significantly improve the essay.
coherence and cohesion
While the introduction and conclusion are present, they lack clarity and do not effectively frame the ideas presented in the essay. There is also a lack of coherence in connecting the ideas throughout the essay. Using clear transitions and organizing the ideas more effectively would improve coherence and cohesion.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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