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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugars which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
people
 are majorly focused on their health. Some
people
 think that many manufactured food and drink
products
 contain a high amount of
sugar
, and for that reason,
people
 are suffering from many health problems the
government
 should
increase
 the
price
 of the
items
 which contain high amounts of
sugar
. I strongly agree with
this
 statement and I think that organisations should research more on their
products
 and manufacture
products
 that contain less
sugar
. I will explain my reasons for it in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, if sugary
products
 will be expensive
then
people
 will eventually consume less sugary
items
 on daily basis. To illustrate
this
, the manufacturer does not properly mention the amount of carbohydrate that they mix in a particular item and for that reason, individuals are consuming more and more sugary
items
.
For example
, "Mazza juice" contains a high amount of
sugar
, if
people
 will drink it on daily basis
then
 they will suffer from many diseases
such
 as obesity and diabetes. If the
government
 will
increase
 the
price
 of sugary
items
then
people
 will definitely consume fewer sugary
products
 for their uses.
Furthermore
, if the authorities will
increase
 the
price
 of the high amounts of
sugar
items
then
people
 will definitely move to other choices and choose a healthy diet, which will be beneficial for
people
's health and the
government
 can save more on healthcare in the long run.
Also
, manufacturing companies should research more on their food and drinks, and produce less sugary
items
.
For example
, "coca-cola zero" has no
sugar
 and helps individuals to enjoy their drink with no
sugar
.
Moreover
,
people
 will not raise violence against the
government
 to
increase
 the
price
 of
products
 if companies produce
items
 that contain less
sugar
. To conclude, due to the
increase
 in MRP
people
 will eventually buy less sugary
products
 and choose a healthy diet.
Therefore
, by produce less sugary
items
 helps individuals prevent diseases like diabetes and obesity.
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