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IMPROVEMENTS IN HEALTH, EDUCATION AND TRADE ARE ESSENTIAL FOR THE DEVELOPMENT OF POORER NATIONS. HOWEVER,THE GOVERNMENTS OF RICHER NATIONS SHOULD TAKE MORE RESPONSIBILITY FOR HELPING THE POORER NATIONS IN SUCH AREAS. Do you agree or disagree with opinion?

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IN
THIS
 PERIOD OF MODERNITY, THE CRUCIAL ELEMENTS OF BEING A DEVELOPED NATION ARE COUNTED AS IMPROVED HEALTH,
EDUCATION
, AND
TRADE
 SYSTEMS, AND ONE WIDELY HELD OPINION IS THAT THE GOVERNMENTS OF WEALTHY NATIONS SHOULD SUPPORT UNDERPRIVILEGED
COUNTRIES
 IN TERMS OF THESE AREAS. I STRONGLY AGREE WITH
THIS
 NOTION AND MY OPINION WILL BE DISCUSSED IN
FURTHER
 PARAGRAPHS. THE
FIRST
 AND FOREMOST REASON BEHIND
THIS
 AGREEMENT IS THAT AS LONG AS THE
EDUCATION
 SYSTEM IS NOT BEING DEVELOPED,
COUNTRIES
 SUFFERING FROM POVERTY CAN NOT ESCAPE FROM
THIS
 SITUATION, EVEN IN THEIR FUTURE GENERATIONS. AT THAT POINT, DEVELOPED
COUNTRIES
 CAN AID THESE
COUNTRIES
 BY SHARING THEIR CURRICULUMS OR TEACHING METHODS.
FOR EXAMPLE
, IF FINLAND HAD SHARED THE DETAILS OF THEIR ENTIRE
EDUCATION
 SYSTEM, STUDENTS IN TURKEY WOULD HAVE HAD MORE SUCCESS IN THE WORLD ARENA, AND AS A CONSEQUENCE TURKEY WOULD HAVE HAD A MORE STABLE FINANCIAL SITUATION. OTHER SUPPORTING POINTS IN FAVOR OF
THIS
 STATEMENT INCLUDE THE IMPORTANCE OF
TRADE
 AND HEALTH SYSTEMS IN BECOMING A DEVELOPED COUNTRY. UNDEVELOPED
COUNTRIES
 SHOULD BE HELPED IN THESE AREAS TOO. TO AN EXTENT, WHILE CITIZENS SUFFER FROM PREVENTABLE DISEASES AND DO NOT KNOW ABOUT HOW THEY CAN
TRADE
 THEIR PRODUCTS TO MAKE A PROFIT, THEY CAN NEVER HAVE WELL-BEING AND WEALTH. FOR A BETTER WORLD, THE GOVERNMENTS HAVING
THIS
 KNOWLEDGE SHOULD SHARE THEIR EXPERIENCE AND TREATMENTS METHODS WITH OTHERS. TO CONCLUDE, NOT ONLY DO HEALTH,
EDUCATION
, AND
TRADE
 SYSTEMS MAKE A COUNTRY DEVELOP, BUT THEY OUGHT TO BE SHARED WITH OTHER UNFORTUNATE
COUNTRIES
 TO HAVE A BETTER WORLD.
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