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prevention is better than cure. The research and treatment of diseases is too expensive, so it would be better to invest in preventive measures.

#prevention #cure #research #treatment #diseases #measures
In today’s world disease increases day by day and vice versa, cure
also
 but it costs millions of dollars to the strength budget of the country. I believe that we use should start thinking about alternatives
such
 as preventing them and health education. A large amount of money is used to develop rescue and treatments and to discover vaccination . One of the best ways to educate is awareness of health education in children, adults, and old ages people. Health education in school must be part of the discipline system, seminars for adults or promoted through celebrities on television Adadvertises in public places or rewards for it. On other, handOn the other hand, assess the prevention. If we prevent them to spread it will be easy. The best way is to eliminate bad habits
such
 as washing our hands while eating, stopping, smoking and drinking. Pursue a good lifestyle by eating a healthy diet like fresh fruit and vegetable and doing regular exercises
such
, as walking, yoga, or swimming. And if some people are sick, they must diagonicsbe diagnosed properly.
For example
, H1N1 is spread from monkeys to humans if we proper diagnosis diagnoses and
first
 find it we stop to spread in humans or tuberlocisistuberculosis in Germany. I strongly believe that prevention is the best cure in today’s world, all the person in should start thinking about it without wasting money on a cure.
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