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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and gie your own opinion.

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It is widely accepted that education has an indispensable character in
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anthropological history. Without
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 education system,
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an individual
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individual
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 can have nothing to compete with others, not to mention a country. Some
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 a belief that individual who is cultivated in the region should contribute to the place growing
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up, while others stand the reverse
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. From my perspective, it is a controversial issue which deserves an in-depth discussion.
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, the front and centre in its
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 that, based on our moral culture, everyone is taught to be thankful and grateful as a child. Since most
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 living in Taiwan
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 fostered by
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 beautiful island, it makes sense to devote what we learn or what we have to
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 blessed isle whenever we are capable
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, those who are highly educated and specialized in professionals in Taiwan usually cost more resources from the government, or speak more precisely, from taxes.
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, it is reasonable for those intellectuals who are nourished by
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 place to contribute their professional skills back to
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 society. In
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 way, the small and beautiful heaven can be competitive and
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 survive persistently. At the other end of the spectrum,
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 a pivotal role does freedom plays in many realms of
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 world. Freedom, as we learn, is
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 basic human right that even parents cannot deprive
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their
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 the aforementioned, some highly educated
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 argue that it does not make sense to limit their will to work
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wherever they want. The point they stand up with is what they earn nowadays is through their own efforts. To accomplish the achievements, some
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 spend more time studying harder than others, sacrificing their sleep and childhood, etc.
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, they should be free
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not only mentally but
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 physically. In sum, giving back certainly and undoubtedly has many merits in the development of
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society;
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, there are assorted
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ways to give feedback to the mother place.
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,
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 can have great success in the other country and donate lots of money back to
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mother land
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, I personally believe that it is unreasonable to limit
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 to stay
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 their homeland to work as
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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