In many cities the population is increasing. Some say that the urbanisation process denies us knowing our neighbors, and this causes a loss of community sense. What is the main problem with this? What measures can be taken to overcome it?

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people claim that overpopulation has been experienced in both developing and developed
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don't even know their vicinity and it is
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lack of communication and friendship
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society. The
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of facilities
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for some human beings in
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rural places. The number of
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has been increasing nowadays. Because of
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better quality of education, so they are forced to move into the cities. Another cause is the scarcity of
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healthcare service which is the most important one. There are not enough medication facilities in the countryside or the areas which
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far away from the cosmopolitans. In order to
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, most of the people aren't able to have a good service and have to go
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the
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of the region. Actually, there are
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. Learning has been a significant issue all the time,
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base for the learner whenever and wherever. In
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medical service, the states
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a leading role again. They have to
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a measure to solve a difficulty. The more healthcare
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, the
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communities get into the cities. To sum up, sometimes
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who live in the villages are faced problems that insist them to leave their comfort zone, but there is always a solution to overcome. If these steps are taken by the government, it will be affecting the societies in a positive way and plus help to develop the states.
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