Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of the society. Others, however, believe, that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people assume that
parents
are responsible to guide
children
to be excellent members
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society.
However
, others believe that
school
is the place to learn
this
. ​ On one hand,
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parents
paerents
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parents
should take an obligation for teaching them because they are
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role models of them since they were born.
For example
, they are taught
the
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basic behaviours
such
as standing up, sitting down and eating by spoon
by
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their
parents
since they were young. And
then
,
parents
are the most
familiest
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families
people for them before attending
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school
.
In addition
, they imitate their
parents
’ behaviours both straightforwardly and rapidly because they believe that there is no one who can understand their feelings except
from
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their
parents
.
Moreover
,
parents
have the ability which can talk to their
children
till they accept the thing which can be beneficial for them
although
they are not interested in it. ​
On the other hand
,
school
is
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magnificent place to learn
this
because it is the new
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area
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which can provide a lot of activities and
skills
.
For instance
, they will do every activity with their roommates
such
as cleaning the room, joining the
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clubs and doing the assignments if they
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attend
attent
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attend
the
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school
. And
then
, they communicate with different standards of students and they will improve
in
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their communication
skills
. After that, they are not supervised by their owners when they go to
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school
so
that
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they need to be independent and friendly with their friends.
Subsequently
, they will improve the
skills
that are not only essential but
also
important to become a good member of society. ​ In conclusion, some people think that
parents
should take an obligation for teaching their
children
to be excellent members of society. Others assume that
school
is one of the best places to learn
this
. From my point of view,
children
can learn a lot of new experiences and
skills
at
school
rather than
home
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. And
then
,
school
is the
center
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of
place
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where can produce
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good citizens.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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