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some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Disuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #attention #disuss
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The diagram illustrates the process
how
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of how
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instant
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noodles
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 are manufactured. It is obvious that there are eight main
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 for making
instant
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noodles
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, from the initial step for storage silos and flour to the eventual
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 of
labeling
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labelling
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 and sealing.
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 at the process of making
instant
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noodles
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 in more detail, we can see flour transported by truck and
storage
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 in silos in the
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 stage.
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, flours are mixed
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with
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 water and oil, using rollers
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for
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 the following
step
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 3 and 4, these are dough sheets and dough strips respectively. After that,
dough
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 will be transformed into
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 discs,
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 cooked and dried
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with
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 oil in the six steps. For the following
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,
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 will be put in cups and add some vegetables and spices for
flavoring
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flavour
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 the
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.
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, the
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 step for manufacturing
instant
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noodles
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 is labelling and sealing
on
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apply
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the cups. The process of manufacturing
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noodles
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need
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needs
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 8
stages
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 to gain completed
instant
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noodles
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