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People should never eat meat because raising animals for human consumption is cruel. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons r your answer, and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There are people of the opinion that giving
children
 a job around the house develops their character.
Although
 it is
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quite a contentious issue, whether to put an extra duty on
children
 would become a stress for them, I strongly believe that
such
 an approach has only benefits and no drawbacks. I see two significant reasons why parents should encourage youngsters to do some work around the house.
First
 of all,
this
 helps teenagers to grow up.
For example
,
doing
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 some
job
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 around the home,
children
 learn new things and how to rely on themselves.
This
 cultivates self-reliability,
self-sufficiency
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and self-sufficiency
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 and
build
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 their character - the factors, which make a difference between a child and an adult. Another reason for making
children
 responsible for helping
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parent
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 with a household is
improving
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 relationships in the family.
This
 is because
children
 start to acknowledge their contribution to the family as a member and get
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praise from the parents.
Consequently
,
this
 stimulates understanding among the family and makes relationships better. With that being said, it is important to adjust
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 level of difficulty of a job, so
children
 will not get any harm.
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