Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages togeather. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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that
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changing the ordinary routine. While new generations believe that
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is an important tool to make nations closer. I believe that
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great to make
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melody can attract more listeners even if they do not
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nice
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and touch the heart and feeling.
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citizens
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citizens
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which can be observed by the
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voices.
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, Listening to
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is a great habit
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time at work and they can be so stressed but if they put
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and start to enjoy the playlist, their day will be much better. A prime example is
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Mangers who are advising the new employees to have
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foreign
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on the playlists as it makes their day joyful. In conclusion, Human ears are much
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, not only do youth enjoy
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but elders
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love to do the same. In my opinion, everyone has to enjoy
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time of his day looking for a relax words with
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • transcend
  • mutual understanding
  • cultural barriers
  • linguistic barriers
  • cultural exchange
  • traditions
  • instruments
  • rhythms
  • appreciation
  • respect
  • diversity
  • intergenerational bonding
  • age gap
  • popular music trends
  • global events
  • festivals
  • shared experiences
  • sense of community
  • technological advances
  • digital platforms
  • streaming services
  • accessible
  • cross-cultural
  • connections
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