Some people think young people are not suitable for important positions in the government , while other people think it is a good idea for young people to take on these positions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Youth

are active and skilled. Whilst opponents see that young people can not be in a higher position, Proponents believe that giving new generations a chance

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their right. In my opinion, the chance for any position

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to be given

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any qualified person. On one hand, the

youth

are active,

however

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they can be smart and more active at work.

In other words

, age does not matter, the most important thing is if

this

person

right

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for the place or not.

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, If a new graduate who was much active at

univeristy

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university

and studied more to finish the Master degree and the Doctorate, should be accepted on the suitable position at

government

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Hence

, Not only do elders deserve to be

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given

gaven

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given

chance

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at work but

youth

also

they

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need to take their

role

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On the other hand

, the elders have to participate in

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different

differnt

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different

work levels because they are experienced and can guide the new generations. To illustrate, new

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employees

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employes

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employees

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need to be directed till they have

the

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enough

experiences

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especially

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governmental jobs. A prime example is, Bank

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managers

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mangers

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always from elders as they are wise and got

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apply

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enough dealing with different kinds of problems during their carrier,

such

experienced people

they

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can create a new

generations

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generation

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of hard workers who can be

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responsible

responsable

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responsible

in the future

about

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sensitive operations. In conclusion, after

this

essay has shown each view I can say that

youth

is important for

future

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the future

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of any

businesses

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but they have to be trained and good educated. I am convinced that to be old or young

not

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does not

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mean much but the most important thing is the qualifications.

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