Some people think young people are not suitable for important positions in the government , while other people think it is a good idea for young people to take on these positions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Youth
are active and skilled. Whilst opponents see that young people can not be in a higher position, Proponents believe that giving new generations a chance
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their right. In my opinion, the chance for any position
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to be given
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any qualified person. On one hand, the
youth
are active,
however
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they can be smart and more active at work.
In other words
, age does not matter, the most important thing is if
this
person
right
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for the place or not.
For example
, If a new graduate who was much active at
univeristy
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university
and studied more to finish the Master degree and the Doctorate, should be accepted on the suitable position at
government
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.
Hence
, Not only do elders deserve to be
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given
gaven
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given
chance
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at work but
youth
also
they
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need to take their
role
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roles
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.
On the other hand
, the elders have to participate in
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different
differnt
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different
work levels because they are experienced and can guide the new generations. To illustrate, new
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employees
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employes
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employees
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need to be directed till they have
the
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enough
experiences
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experience
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especially
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at
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governmental jobs. A prime example is, Bank
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managers
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mangers
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managers
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always from elders as they are wise and got
an
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enough dealing with different kinds of problems during their carrier,
such
experienced people
they
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can create a new
generations
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generation
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of hard workers who can be
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responsible
responsable
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responsible
in the future
about
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sensitive operations. In conclusion, after
this
essay has shown each view I can say that
youth
is important for
future
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the future
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of any
businesses
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business
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but they have to be trained and good educated. I am convinced that to be old or young
not
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mean much but the most important thing is the qualifications.
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  • Experience and wisdom
  • Fresh perspective
  • Innovative ideas
  • Contemporary issues
  • Energy levels
  • Adaptability
  • Emerging trends
  • Enthusiasm
  • Stability
  • Maintaining the status quo
  • Maturity and responsibility
  • Risk-taking
  • Far-reaching consequences
  • In touch with
  • Representative governance
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  • Changing dynamics
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