Some people think young people are not suitable for important positions in the government , while other people think it is a good idea for young people to take on these positions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Youth
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are active and skilled. Whilst opponents see that young people can not be in a higher position, Proponents believe that giving new generations a chance
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their right. In my opinion, the chance for any position
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to be given
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any qualified person. On one hand, the
youth
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are active,
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however
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they can be smart and more active at work.
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, age does not matter, the most important thing is if
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person
right
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for the place or not.
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, If a new graduate who was much active at
univeristy
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university
and studied more to finish the Master degree and the Doctorate, should be accepted on the suitable position at
government
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the government
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.
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, Not only do elders deserve to be
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given
gaven
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given
chance
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at work but
youth
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also
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they
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need to take their
role
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roles
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.
On the other hand
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, the elders have to participate in
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different
differnt
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different
work levels because they are experienced and can guide the new generations. To illustrate, new
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employees
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employes
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employees
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need to be directed till they have
the
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enough
experiences
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experience
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especially
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at
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in
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governmental jobs. A prime example is, Bank
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managers
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mangers
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managers
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always from elders as they are wise and got
an
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apply
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enough dealing with different kinds of problems during their carrier,
such
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experienced people
they
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can create a new
generations
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generation
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of hard workers who can be
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responsible
responsable
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responsible
in the future
about
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sensitive operations. In conclusion, after
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essay has shown each view I can say that
youth
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is important for
future
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the future
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of any
businesses
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business
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but they have to be trained and good educated. I am convinced that to be old or young
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does not
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mean much but the most important thing is the qualifications.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Experience and wisdom
  • Fresh perspective
  • Innovative ideas
  • Contemporary issues
  • Energy levels
  • Adaptability
  • Emerging trends
  • Enthusiasm
  • Stability
  • Maintaining the status quo
  • Maturity and responsibility
  • Risk-taking
  • Far-reaching consequences
  • In touch with
  • Representative governance
  • Historical examples
  • Proven track record
  • Changing dynamics
  • Fresh leadership
  • Modern issues
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