You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice

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Dear Sir or Madam,

To begin

with, let me explain who we are. We are the Deed band , a charity band, we perform at birthday parties, wedding functions, etc.

Secondly

, I will explain what we do to our neighbourhood. we do not charge people for our performances we just accept some donations from families for whom we are performing for their occasions. ,

Also

we spend all fouds for students who are in poor condition of life standards,

moreover

,we are busy providing free music tutoring sessions along with chorrin rehearsal excessive for the local church.

furthermore

.I would bring evidence that our social group is extremely efficient for our council as we could not only enhance the recreational amenities but

also

promote the cultural level of the province as well as mention philanthropic activities. but it has been tough to continue our duties, with the new timetable of the community hall, we are facing difficulty to continue our practices. We met every Tuesday and Friday in the audio room to do our practices. I kindly request from you, consider our aim prosperity and make necessary arrangements to get us back on our training. I would appreciate your kind attention to

this

matter, and I look forward to hearing from you. Yours sincerely, M.DEHBASHI

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

211 words

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