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In some areas of the US a ‘ curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult What is your opinion about this.

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The definition of
curfew
 is
where
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when
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 people are not allowed to travel or be in public at a particular time. In
few
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a few
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 cities in the US impose
curfew
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a curfew
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 where
the
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apply
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teenagers
 are restricted to
be
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being
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 outdoor during a specific time in the night hours, only if he/she
is being describe
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is describing
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my
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in my
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 point of view. In
the
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apply
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recent years,
COVID
 19 was spreading around the world, in order for the local authorities to be
a
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strict with the general public and reduce the number of cases many countries imposed
curfew
.
U.S.
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The U.S.
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 was one of the countries amongst it, the
COVID
 cases were drastically arising
amongst
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among
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 the
teenagers
,
therefore
 in order to decrease
COVID
-19
spread
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,spread
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 the local authorities decided to impose
curfew
 to be outdoor unless the
teenagers
 were accompanied by an adult.
COVID
 19 disease is
an
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apply
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airborne, at least for fourteen to twenty-one days the person needs to be isolated from others.
During
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The
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the
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these
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days
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day's
days'
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teenagers
 suffer mentally, which led to non-communicable diseases at their young
age
 since there is no interaction or movement with their friends or they are unable to visit the mall, or other public places and as a whole no socialising.
My
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In my
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 opinion in
this
 matter, I disagree that local authorities imposing
curfew
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a curfew
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 and
additionally
restricting
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restrict
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movement
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the movement
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 of one
age
 group only,
however
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,however
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 the said disease spread amongst all
age
 groups
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, therefore,
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therefore
 the imposing of
curfew
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a curfew
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 to apply
for
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to
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 all individuals as
COVID
 19 has no
age
 limit.
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