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Some people believe that tourists should accept social and environmental responsibility while others believe that tourists should not accept any responsibility at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered by some that while visiting a rustic a tourist needs to take responsibility for social and environmental, while others are on the opposite side of
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 idea. I strongly believe that each country has its own history and social rules to admit while staying in that area.
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 with, each tourist is supposed to acknowledge the local atmosphere and be respectful of touristic zones.
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, some places have been admired for their ancestral monuments, so being careless or acting inaccurate in that location may damage the constructions holding the nation's history.
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, not all cultures are the same,
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 in some places owing to their beliefs and religious actions like drinking alcohol may show disrespect towards them.
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, Saudi Arabia is known as an Islamic province and depending on the religion drinking or making the business of alcohol is prohibited in
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 agrarian.
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, not fully understanding the regional life might result in enormous problems like hectic traffic or noise which are not welcomed by residents.
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, driving through an area or making night parties may be strange activities for the locals, so not to bother them it is better to respect their way of living.
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, each tourist is a representative of his own nation and culture, so there is a responsibility to balance the two nations' respect for each other. To conclude, for the explanations given above, I believe that any person visiting another bucolic culture needs to be aware of the regional obligations.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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