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Many schools are arranging unpaid work for teenagers to get some work experience in institutions or companies, because it is beneficial for students as well as institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#schools #work #teenagers #institutions #companies #students
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By and large, the requirements of the world are becoming more challenging day
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bay
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 day than they used to be in the past. It is extremely challenging to contain all features that employers require for
recruitments
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 and the most vitally important one of them is
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work experience. Due to that reason, several education
centers
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 provide their students with volunteer
works
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consequently
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 their future careers may be relatively more auspicious than their counterparts. Personally, I completely stand for
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 of all, knowing the fundamentals of each profession
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in
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 early age is embraced as a keystone of
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 successful work life. Owing to
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 clause, numerous chances have been created for the adolescents to get the basic information about their field, albeit without salary. Their enthusiasm can be boosted and many qualified workers may be grown for
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sustainable development. In the future in lieu of beginning
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beginner
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 level, they may directly
enroll
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 in any jobs from high positions.
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, in case their directors do not create chances for work and get experience, it may result in various egregious consequences.
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, since they will have a lot of spare time, it is not known
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how they will appreciate
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 time duration. In case their way is not appropriate they will be upbraided because of
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, even though
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 environment is not created for them. Above all, in order to stay away from
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, school authorities ought to implement several internship programs for them. To sum up, the significance of early gained background is substantially great
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 each potential employee.
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 some companies do not give any payment
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 youngsters, the information that they may secure there is much more essential than any monetary
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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  • networking opportunities
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