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Recent advances in information technology have made communication between people a lot easier. However, these advances are negatively affecting human relationships as people spend less time in the company of others. Discuss the causes and suggest some solutions for this. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Have you ever wondered what life would be like without a phone, laptop, or other
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 for a day? We often see
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 as an essential part of our
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 and think these changes are due to
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, there is an opinion: "
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 are changing
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 every day, but
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 is
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 changing
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." Is
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 increasingly dominating and orienting
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 and habits not only of individuals but
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 of communities or generations? The term
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 is derived from Greek, meaning
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's tools, skills, and tricks in life activities. Today,
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 is a system of methods, tools, and capabilities for solving problems or processes that create products (physical and intangible). Humans are increasingly developing
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 but simultaneously dependent on it, being dominated by it.
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 development and transformation is an inevitable rule when
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 actively replace an essential part (basic, core) or the entire
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 in use with another, more advanced
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.
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 is present in all areas of our
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 and brings undeniable benefits. Our
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 are getting better and better, saving
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, etc.
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, there are
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 adverse effects when the dependence on
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 increases. That leads to lazy thinking and inactivity; relationships
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 become cold and dry when most choose to maintain meetings,
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, and
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 only through messages on social networks. Festival. The world of
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 makes
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 easily fall into a delusion. In the present era, it is still necessary to develop
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, the use of
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 needs to be moderate and appropriate. The authorities need to strengthen the management and use of
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 to serve healthy and community purposes.
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, each person must
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 balance using
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 and performing responsibilities to the community and family. Let
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 become a relevant and effective tool for our
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.
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