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Women can do everything that men can and they even do it better. They also can do many things that men cannot. But it is a fact that their work is not appreciated as much as men's, although they have to sacrifice a lot for their family and career... It is said: "A woman's place is in the home." What do you think?

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I partially agree with
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 statement. In terms of jobs nowadays organisations are giving priority to
women
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 at most workplaces and they do their effort sincerely without any hesitation. In some workplaces where a lot of hard work is needed where the workforce should be
men
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instead
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 of
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. In today's world females are working more than
men
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 whereas, they complete their housework within the stipulated time and does their personal work if they are working lady. They complete their work and go to their office and
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 maintain their life balance by doing personal and professional jobs.
Men
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 always do their personal tasks and their office assignments on a daily basis. Lady who is working prepares themselves to cope with the housework by doing professional tasks.
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, In the early 20s
women
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 usually does their housework only and they were well educated. They sacrifice a lot for their family and career.
Women
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 always gave their best effort in any workplace than
men
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 and they don't get an appreciation for their job. Everybody has their own capability to show their talent. Nowadays government is planning to give more employment to
women
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 in the government sector and it will encourage womenfolk for the upcoming age. In
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 21st ,century everybody wants to be independent and both genders want to maintain their life balance. To conclude, genders should get their appreciation in terms of doing their tasks without giving priority to both males and females.
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