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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary schools rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#experts #children #language #schools #school #outweigh
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It is true that learning a
second
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 language at primary school has many benefits. In my opinion, the advantages of
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 outweigh the drawbacks.
To begin
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 with, there are many things to consider here about advantages. The
first
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 thing I should mention is that could help young people to have
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fresh and active
brains
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.
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 , parents can have
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genius and intelligent
children
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 by using a bilingual strategy. The
second
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 thing is about their
children
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 can improve their abilities to communicate with a variety of friends.
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 , young ages who know at least 2
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 have successful relationships and it
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 can be a kind of progressive aspect
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 their life.
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 , disadvantages of
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 issue have some reasons like the youth can not focus and concentrate on their mother tongue.
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 , they will be confused by learning another language and can not separate which
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 is essential to learn and speak . Even though , there is actually no evidence to support
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 view and
children
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 from bilingual families are just
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 as well as monolingual
children
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 ,
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 of my cousins , who
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 in Iran, knows at least two
languages
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 due to the fact that she participated in French class since she was 4 years old . But , she is always confused about the differences between the
first
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 and
second
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languages
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 , and can not recognize which
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 is her principal and mother tongue. To sum up,
children
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 are talented to learn whatever they want and be successful in their life. I wish
one
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 day all
children
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 all around the world learn many
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they can
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Enhance
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Pronunciation
  • Mimic
  • Native-like accent
  • Cultural awareness
  • Sensitivity
  • Exposure
  • Resource allocation
  • Qualified
  • Effective instruction
  • Overwhelmed
  • Curriculum
  • Undermining
  • Mother tongue
  • Prioritizing
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