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some people feel that the exploration of space justifies a large amount of government and private investment. Other people think that this field is of increasingly low relevance, and should not be a priority. Debate both sides of this discussion, and explain your own view. How important is it for us to explore space at the moment?

#people #exploration #space #amount #government #investment #field #relevance #priority #debate #discussion #moment
People
 have different views about
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space
 missions. While some
people
 are interested
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the
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Cosmose
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Cosmos
 exploration, I believe that there are more important issues today, which are neglected by governments.
However
, investigation of planets, stars, and
galexies
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galaxies
 is very expensive and
need
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to
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 many high-cost instruments, but lots of
people
 think that it is a
futurstic
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futuristic
 field and may be open a novel way for humans to access more sources of valuable substances.
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 the other side, it has been always a basic question for humans to know who created
this
 world or how does it work?
In addition
, it is a way for politicians to exhibit their power and today we see many
space
compatitions
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competitions
competition
 between developed countries. There are several reasons why I would
argued
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 against
space
 exploration.
Firstly
, there are so urgent
priority
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 today, which
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intensely
intensly
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intensely
 need to fund.
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, we
faced
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 with sanitation service shortages in most
of
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poor
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country
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.
Secondly
, by
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 these
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unnecessary
unneccessary
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unnecessary
 programs, we can assign more money to drug discovery and medical subjects.
Furthermore
, we have lots of places
in
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 our planet where we know
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anything
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any thing
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 about them.
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, 98
percent
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 of the sea surfaces
is
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 unknown
for
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 us, which may
be
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lead to some disaster like
sonamies
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economies
. It should be mentioned that if we have
better
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 understanding
about
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 the Earth
instead
 of
other part
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 of the Sky, it would have more
benefit
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 for humans.
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Finally
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Finally
, these researches are very dangerous for
people
 and it was seen that many errors in the past, causing
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scientific
scientifics
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scientific
 mortality. In conclusion, I do believe that the exploration of
space
 not only is expensive but
also
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 the funding which can provide
with
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vital studies.
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