A lot of people who wanted to become professional athletes gave up this idea because of the fear of failure and parents' pressure. Do you think that parents should support their children who want to do a career in sports?

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Many people who were good at sports in their childhood gave up on becoming professional athletes because of the lack of support from parents. Growing a successful career in sports often means that the person must start at a young age and must devote time for training and money to hire
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. Since sport is very competitive in nature, it is clear that for a child to have a remote chance to become a successful athlete, parents must overcome the concern of possible failure and provide unconditional support for the child.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parental support
  • ambitions
  • career stability
  • physical health
  • teamwork
  • discipline
  • fame
  • financial success
  • competition
  • risk of injury
  • career span
  • coaching
  • sports management
  • sports medicine
  • backup plan
  • educational background
  • societal pressures
  • expectations
  • mental resilience
  • self-esteem
  • constructive criticism
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