you saw a brochure for a one week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter 1. Explain why you're interested in the tour. 2. Ask for information about dates and prices 3. Express your concerns about your fitness level.

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Dear sir, I am writing to notify you of my interest in the

one week

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walking

tour

organized by your organisation.

This

tour

invitation has taken me down memory lane. When I was little, I usually go for a walk with my dad around our small town.

However

, since I relocated to the city, I have not had the time due to my tight schedule at work. Seeing the invite on the brochure, I have decided to make use of the opportunity. With regards to

this

, I

also

want to confirm the exact date of the

tour

, inclusive

with

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the time.

This

will enable me

prepare

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effectively.

Nevertheless

, I

also

want to bring to your notice my poor fitness status.

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, I have not been actively fit due to the nature of my job

that

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which

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keeps me seated for a whole day.

In other words

, I am concerned about my health and hope I would be able to pull through the

tour

. I will be anticipating your reply. Thank you. Yours faithfully, Ruth Eze

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

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Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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