Some people believe that people today have no interest in maintaining the traditional culture of their country or region. Others believe that it is still important to people that we preserve a traditional way of life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is a general belief that nowadays there minority of people who take interest in preserving the traditional aspects of the nation they come from.
On the contrary
, others hold the view that the aforementioned opinion is not true and there are individuals who give value to their cultural background. I agree with the latter and try to elaborate on
this
opinion throughout
this
essay. With the fast pace speed of globalisation, various aspects of other cultures enter the others.
This
is inevitable as humans are gregarious individuals, trying to fit
in particular
groups for common interests.
Therefore
, often time they tend to forget their traditions and
in other words
prioritize what propaganda and populism state.
For instance
, despite that the Christmas is a Christian tradition, most Iranians celebrate and include it as part of their culture. Having said that, there are older populations who consider traditions and the culture of their country of origin as a prominent and vital matter and feel the oblige to not only maintain but transfer
it
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to the
next
generation.
Moreover
, in most cases,
this
leads to obsession and even an unlogical need to advertise them so that they would be appealing to the younger generation.
For example
, while many adolescents do not participate in and hold the 'Ashura' festival-a day when 'Imam Hossein' died-, older ones attempt to preserve
this
by putting up flags all over towns and advertising it in their communities. In conclusion,
although
it is believed that in the contemporary world, preserving traditions has become a redundant issue, I strongly agree with the view that there are still many individuals who put their best effort into maintaining what they believe has been theirs throughout
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history of their nation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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