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Some people say that educational success of a student is the result of the work of a good teacher.Others say it depends on the character of the student.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #success #student #work #teacher #character
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people
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 say that
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schooling
success
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 undergraduate
in
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is
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 the result of the
work
 of
a
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 best
tutor
.
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,other people
says
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 depends on the hard
work
 of the
student
. On one hand, pupils say that any good
tutior
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tutor
tutors
 to teach all graduated success
students
.
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 of parts.Listening, Reading, Writing and Speaking.That's
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students
to
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join IELTS classes.If any good teacher
teach
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 all
students
 in
proper
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 way it means
student
also
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best
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.Everything depends on the teacher and less than
students
.
On the other hand
, some people say
firstly
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work
 of the undergraduate because
students
 do course best not all time depend on the
tutor
.If
undergraduated
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undergraduate
undergraduates
 are not doing study well we
are not complain
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the
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tutor
.
All
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 depends on the
student
 they do learn properly everything. In conclusion,
teacher
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teach
the
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student
 because
tutor
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are
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 very
knowlegeable
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knowledgeable
 more than
students
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the students
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 .But it depends on the
student
 if they
are properly learn
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 to study
a
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 best way it's very
gud
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good
 for
students
.I think
depend
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 on the hard
work
 of the
student
.
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