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Polce budget changes in a area of Britain .Give your opinion .

The given table demonstrates the data on the sources of
income
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 of the
police
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 and two pie charts depict how the money was spent on different purposes by the
police
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in particular
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 areas of Britain in the
years
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 2017 and 2018. Overall, it is evident that the total
income
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 was increased due to the up wording trend of the
income
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 from the sources.
However
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, the major expenditure was salaries for officers and staff in both
years
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. According to the table, the national government gave the highest amount of money to the
police
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 in both given
years
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, which slightly increased from £ 175.5m to £177.8m from 2017 to 2018.
This
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 is followed by the local taxes, which significantly rose their contribution to the
police
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income
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 from £91.2m to £ 102.3m in 2017 and 2018 respectively.
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, other sources,
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 as grants grew slightly from £38m to £38.5m within a given period. In terms of expenses, salaries for officers and staff made up exactly a quarter of the total expenditure in 2017, which dropped by 6% in 2018 to 69% of the total. Money spent on technology nearly doubled from 8% to 14% from 2017 to 2018, whereas the cost of building and transport remained constant at 17% in both given
years
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.

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