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In many countries people are concerned about the number of children who are overweight. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Many people argue that are concerned about the number of
children
 who are overweight. There
are
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number
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a number
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 of reasons behind the phenomenon and several solutions should be adopted by
government
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the government
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 and individuals to improve the situation. There are two main reasons associated with
this
 tendency,
Firstly
 poor diet,
this
 is mainly due to
overweight
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being overweight
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.
Secondly
 lack of
excecise
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exercise
. Fortunately,
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several
serveral
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several
 measures could be taken to
allaviate
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alleviate
this
 problem. The
first
 solution would be
educate
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children
 about healthy food. They learn to use which kind of food.
Also
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 they know how to prepare
simply
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 healthy meals. Another solution is to encourage youngth people to exercise according to some
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research
reseach
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research
 They spend more time
to play
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 sports.
For example
, Football, badminton, running, jogging,… are very good for
health
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your health
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. In conclusion, It is clear that various reasons for overweight in
children
 and steps need to be taken by
government
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the government
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 and
individual
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individuals
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 to tackle
this
 problem. It can be predicted that there are many
children
 who are healthy life.
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