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Writing Samples
Band 5

single career is out of fashion and multi career is good for earn more . to waht extent do you agree ?

now a days
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nowadays
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 single
career
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 is out of date it is old fashion
one
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 and the latest trend
to
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is to
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 select several
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career
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careers
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 to earn money easy and better for
future
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the future
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.
Yes
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,Yes
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 I agreed with the statement that several
occupation
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occupations
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 has many benefits to
get
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getting
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 revenue and
obtain
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obtaining
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 knowledge
however
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in
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apply
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a single
career
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 has only
one
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 source of earning. In
this
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essay
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,essay
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 we demonstrate the following points. To commence with the more
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then
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than
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one
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career
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 option is that to obtain various
profession
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 because in
single
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a single
the single
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career
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 they just master in
a
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apply
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one
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career
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 and have
single
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a single
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 source of earning throughout the year
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, for example,
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for example
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 a teacher cannot have
option
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the option
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 to switch to the other
profession
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 because they have no experience and as well as knowledgeable so it is gain to opt multiple
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career
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careers
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 insisted of individual
career
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.
Moreover
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, in a multiple
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profession
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professions
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 we can do job 9 to 5 and
then
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 after that we start our own business through
this
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 we get various experience and met with the different kind of people with the numerous knowledge they give new opportunity and built confidence oneself in comparison to
particular
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a particular
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career
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.
For
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example
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,example
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 MBA holder can do multitasking business like in shares, sales marketing ,data and many more so, various
profession
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 is better to obtain in a competitive world to survive in the society. In
conclusion
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,conclusion
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 I think that obtaining numerous sources
have
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has
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 benefits rather than solely
career
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 it is important to make
strong
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a strong
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 financial condition in less time to secure our future.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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