Violence in playgrounds is increasing. However, it is important that parents should teach children not to hit back at bullies. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant examples from you own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays
children
’s
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aggression
agression
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aggression
is one of the most
discussion
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topics.
Although
the way of moderating conflicts between
children
is the most popular topic which psychologists discuss. I
am agree
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that people should teach
children
how not to be toxic in interactions. In
this
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I will highlight the possible points why it is better for
children
avoid
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aggression.
First
of all, the one of main goals of parenting is to show
to
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children
how to be
carrying
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to all living things. To feel empathy is a crucial basis for
moral
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the moral
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health of the future generation. If every child will think that it is inappropriate to hurt someone, there will not
a
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conflict situation.
For example
, it was
a
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apply
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BBC research that showed that
children
who have
a
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apply
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brothers or sisters are more thoughtful with other
children
,
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because they know how to care
other
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about other
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people’s
fillings
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feelings
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.
Secondly
, violence begets violence. If everyone will answer aggression to aggression, there will be a circle of negative emotions. Actually, it is impossible to win the
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bullying
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bulling
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bullying
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by using the same methods. I think in
case
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like that the best choice is to try to explain that person’s feelings had been hurt and try to find the exit from the situation together.
For example
, there was a CNT research that showed that parents who
pays
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attention
about
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to
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methods of
healthy
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a healthy
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way to
resolving
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conflicts have kids who have more successful communication. In conclusion, as adults teach kids about carrying feelings and avoiding violence, the young generation
become
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more supportive and emphatic. It could help
to
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people improve their emotional intellect in the future.
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