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Nowadays many students have the opportunity to study for part or all of their courses in foreign countries. While studying abroad brings many benefits to individual students, it also has a number of disadvantages. Do you agree or disagree.

#students #opportunity #study #part #courses #countries
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part time
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 study in
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country
 is common for students.
Although
 Studying abroad has many positives,
however
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 it has demerits as well. I agree that studying outside the
country
 comes with many big or small sacrifices and disadvantages. In my
opinion
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 taking a degree from a foreign university opens up so many doors. Not just in the home
country
 but
also
 in many other countries. Apart from professional success, it
also
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the overall development of an individual. Studying in a different environment helps us learn about the new culture, and makes us more accepting
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 things we never thought existed. We become more free and independent and the most important thing is we start admiring other
culture
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 and treat everyone with respect. There are so many benefits of studying abroad yet there are so many pitfalls of it. The most common drawbacks are; feeling homesick and lonely, difficulty in understanding the local language, Having difficult times adjusting
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 the weather, not getting the local food of their
country
 etc. Apart from these
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 there are so many other
problems
 students going to study abroad face.
Problems
 like getting study loans at very high rates,
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 more money on a course, which can be done at
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 expense in their own
country
.
Besides
 these
problems
, some negative psychological changes
also
 might occur in some youngsters. They may not appreciate their culture as much. In order to fit
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 the new environment
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some individuals try to change themselves and forget who they really are, which is one of the most threatening demerits of studying in
foreign
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country
. In
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 I would like to say that every chance comes with some pros and cons, it is
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 the individual how they use it for their own benefit.
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