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People should follow the customs and traditions when people start to live in a new country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are different views on whether not foreigners should follow local
customs
 and traditions when they come to reside in a new
country
. From my point of view, I believe that
people
 should adapt to local
customs
 and traditions in a new
country
.
On the other hand
, there are many reasons why
people
 don't need to learn about the
customs
 of other
countries
 and regions. we should preserve our character and
customs
 from the original
country
.
This
 is strongly encouraged as a way to preserve and promote the culture of their
country
.
Therefore
, the relationship between
countries
 is enhanced and the connection between
people
 and the community is more and more sustainable.
On the other hand
, I believe that following the culture in new
countries
 can offer them chances to learn valuable skills. They will be more welcomed by the local
people
 and have a closer connection to easily integrate into the community. At the same time, it helps
people
 avoid breaking the laws of these
countries
.
For example
, in some parts of the world, one can buy heavy weapons
such
 as guns and grenades. But in Vietnam, these guns and grenades are considered illegal. In conclusion, my opinion is that it is essential for new residents to follow the local
customs
 and traditions in a new
country
.
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