Smoking is a habit that claims many lives and is a great drain on health service. One way to combat smoking would be to make it illegal. What are the pros and cons of such a government policy? What alternative strategies can you suggest to combat smoking?

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of addiction in almost 90%
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worldwide. The whole
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respiratory
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system gets immunocompromised and
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up with various infections including pneumonia.
Hence
,it can be completely terminated from regulatory bodies worldwide. Keeping all
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of
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and
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,
one
must think of the future generation and must stop themselves.
however
certain methods can be implemented to diminish smoking. On the
one
hand,
tobacco
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industry is
one
largest growing
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worldwide with more than 50% of
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directly earned by our
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government
goverment
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government
through tax.
This
situation has arrived due to
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increase
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mordern
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modern
lifestyle.Statistically,Women
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50%
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entire
tobacco
consumption.It is exactly equal to the
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men's
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count of intake.
On the other hand
,the gradual surge of smoking is leading to
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of several deadly diseases.
For example
,a pregnant woman gives birth to an abnormal foetus if she takes up smoke during her gestation period.It is highly teratogenic.
Additionally
,a man gets highly dependent on
this
addiction and over-consumption leads to chronic obstructive pulmonary illness. Smoking is responsible for all possible critical diseases with higher mortality risks.Passive smoking is much more harmful than
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active smoking.
As a result
,both
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and
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group
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are getting
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by
tobacco
intake.To completely terminate
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situation
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,newer policies must be proposed and strict rules must be incorporated in public places.
For example
,In
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,mostly all architectural buildings and historical monuments
doesnot
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does not
doesn't
all smoking inside their
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premisses
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.
Therefore
, keeping all money-making beneficiary options in mind,all official regulatory legal norms should be made against smoking.The awareness to minimalize smoking must be
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to reduce
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the risk
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of passive smoking to the vulnerable non-smoking population.
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