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There has been a dramatic growth in the number of people studying at universities in the last few decades. While some people see this as a positive trend which raises the general level of education within the community, others fear that it is lowering the quality of educa''tion. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the increase in student numbers at university?

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Dear friend, I hope you are very well. We have
not
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meet
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 up since we were in university. It would be nice if we spend some time together as before. I was told that you are coming to my city for a month. So, If you desire it, I want you to know that I would be pleased if you stay at my home during your
vacations
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. I accept my department is a bit cramped and small, but I am sure you will feel as
you
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if you
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 were in your home. Because of any possible
emergency
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 you could have, whether you are coming or not, I want you to know that I hide the keys
of
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 my home under the carpet of the entrance door. If you stay here, you must follow some rules: you must feed the cats every day at 12 pm;
besides
, the plants must be watered 2 days a week;
finally
, the flat at most must be closed every day at 9 pm because of the
riskness
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riskiness
richness
 of the city. If you don’t want to feel isolated, I recommend you to go to a few places. You could visit a bar which is
next
 to my house.
Also
, if you want to eat something, you could go to
a
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restaurant
estaurant
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restaurant
that is
 near ¿by? the bar I told you about. I hope you visit me. Lucas Ferreyros
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