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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
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It is true that in
this
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 century, especially after the 2000s when internet exploration,
social
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 and economic prosperity were overwhelmingly blasting, there are too many
choices
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 for us to pick up when it comes to making
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decisions in almost every aspect of life. In recent decades before 2000, our
parents
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 generation had to deal with
their
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difficulties in their lives for not having chances in life,
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, going to
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school makes almost everyone
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use their feet and commuting from one place to another, they have few
choices
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 to go from a hard route on land or via the dangerous
wateroute
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water out
. Nowadays, there are varieties of transport
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 to reach a destination, including too many travel packages and different classes
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 each travel route.
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, it is more convenient and easy to commute the itinerary.
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, as today’s world becomes more reliant on information and technology, there is no need to reach too many sources to confirm a news source is reliable and true when we listen to the news.
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, the abundance of educational resources and information
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 one
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click
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can
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 on
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mobile devices without too much trouble.
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, these are true in the developed and developing countries with good governance and systematic bureaucracy in the country except in some autocratic regimes and
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developing countries.
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, it is not yet true for those who are in those settings. Regardless, in today’s world, having too many
choices
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 does not mean
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advantages in our life all the time. As it was difficult for people to cope with the scarcity of
choices
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 in their lives in the past, when they have too many
choices
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, people come to face another problem of choosing the right and useful one for them. In conclusion, I totally agree that nowadays, there are too many
choices
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 in our aspects of everyday lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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