Popular events like the football World Cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Nowadays, popular
events
like the football
world
Cup
and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. Yes, I agree with that. Recent days in
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world wide
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there are so many sporting
events
organised by different organisations. Football
World
Cup
, Olympic
games
,
Paraolympic
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Paralympic
games
, ICC
cricket
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Cricket
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World
Cup
and Tennis
World
Cup
are some examples. These
events
are popular in different regions of the
world
. But
people
all over the
world
like to watch the
events
even
their
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if their
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country
is not participate
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it. They witness the special occasions of the
events
and enjoy
it
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them
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and they live in the event. They move here and they
are try
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to kick the ball by sitting in their living rooms.
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That's
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Thats
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how
people
feel it.
On the other
hand
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by living in
this
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these
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events
people
forget their problems. They feel free and
minds
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their minds
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will
out
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be out
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of
tension
. For
an
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example, India is a huge country with
large
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population. Most of the
people
in India
lives
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under
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tension
because of so many problems. When they come to watch cricket matches they live in that march and forget all their difficulties.
That is
why those
people
cannot tolerate
when
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it when
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the Indian team lose the match. They act very aggressively. In conclusion, most
of
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the
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people
live under
tension
. By watching popular
events
like
football
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the football
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World
Cup
, Cricket
World
Cup
, Olympic
games
, Tennis
games
and other international sporting
events
people
can release
tension
and patriotic emotions in a safe way.
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