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Some people think it is better for children to grown up in the city, while others think that life in the countryside is more suitable for them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both places?

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The environment in which
children
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 are brought up is an incredibly important aspect of their life.Living in
cities
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 is thought
as
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 the best option for
children
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,while others believe that rural area offers more opportunities.
This
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 of all,
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education
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 is better in
cities
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,spending childhood in the countryside
allow
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allows
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 one to understand the importance of nature and learn to live without technological gadgets.As youngsters are in touch with nature,taking care of animals and helping with gardening,they may be provided insight into protecting
environment
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the environment
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.
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,they may not be dependent on smartphones,
internet
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the internet
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 and computers.
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,
children
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 who
raised
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were raised
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 in rural areas
spends
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 approximately 43% less time
on
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surfing social media than those in
cities
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.
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,schools have usually
lower
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of lower
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 quality and they can not offer successful educational
background
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backgrounds
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 as in
cities
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.Because the teachers are keen to pursue a career in
cities
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,they are reluctant to live in
rural
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a rural
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area
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areas
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,
thus
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 it may lead to lowering
the
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apply
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quality
of
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schools.
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,despite the fact that schools
at
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in
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 metropolitan areas are better,
cities
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 are more polluted and it can be detrimental to
children
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’s health.
Instutions
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Institutions
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 in
cities
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 offer students excellent quality of
education
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 as most of the best tutors are there.
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,even if there is an
extracirrucular
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extracurricular
 class that
school
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the school
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 does not offer,it is easy to find it in another place around the city.
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,pollution is the main disadvantage of raising
children
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 in
cities
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.It is known that most of the population of a country live in
cities
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 rather than
countryside
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the countryside
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 and
thus
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 the number of vehicles and factories are higher than those of rural areas.
This
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 can badly
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affect
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effect
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affect
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 the health of
children
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.
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,
children
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 in
cities
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 get
illness
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 more frequently. In conclusion,
main
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 advantages of raising
children
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 in
countryside
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the countryside
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 are letting them
to
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apply
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be more sensitive about nature and allowing them
spend
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to spend
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 less time on technological instruments,
although
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 there is
disadvantage
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a disadvantage
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 of low-quality
education
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.
Furthermore
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,
upbring
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upbringing
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 of
children
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 in
cities
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 has
merit
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the merit
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 of high-quality
education
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 with
demerit
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the demerit
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 of negative effects of pollution on
children
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’s health.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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