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Due to the development and the expansion of supermarkets many small, local markets are unable to compete. some people think that the clossing off local businesses will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent
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, a lot of supermarkets
are
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have been
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 widespread all over the world no matter what country. Some
people
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 consider that local stores will be closed because big companies will be occupied. In my opinion, I partly disagree with
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 statement. First of all, it is evident that local residents trust local businesses.
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 is because they had a strong relationship between staff and
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 for a long time.
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, there is the nearest supermarket which has been in business for 70 years. At that time, local
people
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 already trusted the store’s price, quality, and quantity. If a new big
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 is started in
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 city, the crowd might not go easily because it is unfamiliar
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 them.
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, some news is possible to make the chain store’s image bad.
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, when the same company uses an illegal product,
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 are less
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 purchase it at that supermarket.
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, a smaller
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 has less possibility than a bigger
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.
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, there is no doubt that famous stores and companies are able to have many kinds of products. Since they have a lot of ways to bring and have sufficient money. To illustrate, They are able to have overseas food.
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, they can supply cheaper prices than a local
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. They always buy a massive amount of products at once. As for
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, they are able to do an inexpensive supply for
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. In a nutshell, both opposite businesses can provide many kinds of profit for residents
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 as value and price. From my point of view, I partly disagree because there is no crucial invasion for local businesses because credibility is
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 of the best reasons to buy a product from a local company.
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