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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

#languages #danger #extinction #numbers #people #governments #money #waste
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The given bar graph compares different transportation types in terms of the figures
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incidents
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 and
injuries
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 per 100 million travelled in 2002 Overall, it is noticeable that demand response had the highest
number
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 of both
incidents
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 and
injuries
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 in 2002, whereas the least figures appeared in commuter
rail
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.
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, commuter
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 had relatively high
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 compared to the
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 of
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. Looking
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 at demand response and commuter
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, the former had the highest
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 in both
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 and
injuries
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, at 225 and 173, which were far more than that of any other category;
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, the latter showed the lowest figures among all services, at only 20 in
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 and 17 in
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. Moving onto light
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 and bus, both two subjects had
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 identical
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incidents
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 at 76;
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, the
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number
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 light
rail
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, at 39, was less than that of
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 at 66. As for heavy
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injuries
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were
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