While international tourism offers many advantages a lot of places, it brings about several disastrous effects on both people and environment there. Do the advantages of international touriIsm outweigh the disadvantages?

with the development of traffic technology,
passenger'
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convenience and effectively shorten time have gradually been enhanced so that the rate of international
tourism
has been increasing
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just a few years. there are both merits and demerits to
tourism
.
However
, I think that the demerits are more huge than the merits.
First
of all, I partly agree that international
tourism
offers the most attractive place with many financial benefits as most the tourists are from developed countries so that they consume so much property during travelling.
Furthermore
, the aerial industry can sharply thrive as tourists usually utilise the aeroplane to transport from their countries to the department.
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, if we go
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airport
on
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from JUN to SEP, there are
the
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large number of
people
who may enjoy their vacation.
However
, there
also
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disadvantages to travelling
national
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by national. it causes several detrimental consequences.
Firstly
, it has too much contact between national.
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the
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COVID-19,
people
endeavour to overcome
this
contagious disease while
,
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some
people
who were infected
transported
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everywhere they can go and travel so
that
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the situation was sharply worsening.
follwing
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following
environment,
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most
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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did not operate so many unemployees emerged.
In addition
, endangered animals suffer from the rubbish issue which
people
produce. the amount of trash is gradually increasing year by year as tourists do not concern about animals'
habitat
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. travellers collaborate
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extinction of rare animals with the vice company. In conclusion,
although
tourism
has a variety of financial effects I think that
people
should not have free access to passage
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countries. We should enhance our law and abide by it
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